Sofia Adelson
Sunday, November 6, 2011
Good Dream for a part of a chapter?
How could she articulate a full sentence while drowning? Green hair! I like! However, it would be better if you described the rest of her, like you did with Jack. Also, what context does this scene have in the rest of the story?
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